Smash Cut: Digital Time Reading 9:21:03. Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.
(Car containing JACK AND SISTER NELSON parks in DQ parking lot)
JACK (turns off engine, takes keys out of ignition and opens passenger door. To SISTER NELSON): Don’t you dare get out of this car!
JACK rushes to the windows of the DQ, frantically pounding the glass: Teri! Kim! There’re not here. I can’t see them. (Begins to move back to car when his cellphone rings. JACK answers)
Smash Cut: Chloe at computer at CTU.
CHLOE: Hi Jack, it’s me. Sorry it took so long, but that creepy Milo kept coming over and drooling on me and hitting on me and stuff. He’s always hanging around my desk and won’t leave me alone. He thinks he’s SO funny but he just gives me the creeps. He’s nothing at all like you Jack.
Smash Cut: Back to JACK.
JACK: We’ll deal with Milo later. What can you tell me?
CHLOE: I found them in the satellite photos, Jack. They’re at Pace’s Dairy Ann.
JACK: Dairy Ann, not Dairy Queen. That’s clear across town. I’ll never make it in time. They played me. Chloe, we need to establish a perimeter. I need a chopper and a TAC team at the Dairy Ann ASAP.
CHLOE: But there’s nowhere around there to land a chopper.
JACK: Right across the street is the Hedberg-Solomon Used Car Lot. There’s plenty of space there. Take out the whole lot if you have to! Demolish it! Whatever it takes to make space for the chopper! Just get the men on the ground now!
CHLOE: I’ll see what I can do.
JACK: Make it happen.
CHLOE: Whatever you say, Jack. (mumbling) You are my Edward.
JACK: What was that? I didn’t catch that.
CHLOE: Nevermind. The satellite feed just updated. Teri and Kim are back in the minivan. They’re on the move.
JACK (running back to the car): Don’t lose them. Where are they now?
CHLOE: They’re heading north on 5th West. Now they’re getting on I-15 north.
JACK (to SISTER NELSON): Start driving. Chloe, I’m going to have to put you on hold. I’ve got another call. Stay on the line. (switching cellphone to other line) This is Jack.
Smash Cut: TERI and KIM in backseat of minivan.
TERI (talking into cellphone): Hi, Jack. We’re almost home. Where are you?
Smash Cut: Back to JACK.
JACK: Thank heaven you’re all right. I’ve been trying to reach you.
TERI: Sorry. We turned off our cellphones when we went into the temple, and we forgot to turn them back on again. We’ll see you soon. I love you.
JACK: Love you too.
CHLOE: Love you too.
JACK: What was that, Chloe?
CHLOE: Just glad everyone is OK. See ya, Jack.
JACK (hangs up phone. To SISTER NELSON): You got very lucky just now. But be prepared on Sunday for your recommend interview. I have a feeling it’s going to get very interesting. Now drive me home.
Smash Cut: Digital Time Reading 21:24:00. Tick. Tick. Tick. Tick.
Fade in:
Four panel split screen: Upper left shows BROTHER YOUNG. Upper right shows SISTER NELSON. Lower left shows eight year old girl from the Bishop’s office. Lower right shows man whose features are concealed by shadows. Each of the four is holding a cellphone to his/her ear.
SHADOWY MAN (into cellphone): Explain to me again why Teri and Kim Bauer are still breathing.
BROTHER YOUNG (into cellphone): Jack was getting too close. We had to call off the hit.
SHADOWY MAN (into cellphone): Do I need to bring in another team to take care of this and clean up your mess?
SISTER NELSON (into cellphone): We have things well in hand. The contingency plan is already in place. The midget will take them all out Sunday.
EIGHT YEAR OLD GIRL (speaking into cellphone using a husky, adult female voice): They’ll be dead before I can finish my 2 ½ minute talk. (now speaking in a little girl voice): Bibbity-bobbity-BOOM!
(Everybody laughs).
EIGHT YEAR OLD GIRL (speaking into cellphone, using adult voice): Jack must be prescient. He assigned me to speak on work for the dead.
BROTHER YOUNG: He’s going to need it.
SISTER NELSON: They’re all going to need it.
(Everybody laughs)
Fade out
Heh, heh – good stuff! Thanks, Lactose!
And a perimeter! Or almost. Which is good enough.
Obama gives the underprivileged enough of my money already. In fact he’s given them so much of it…I’m now in danger of becoming underprivileged!
Primarily good, Brother Lactose. Scout salute and square arms all.
@zzyzx Agreed. Which is precisely why I give to a charity that goes only to people in third world countries where it does some good. And the charity doesn’t do handouts. It only gives loans to people who have been screened and are expected to use it and pay it back. It has been very successful at helping these people make a life for themselves.
Good except in the eight seasons of 24 I don’t think there was even one chuckle much less a laugh. I don’t even remember anyone ever smiling now that I think of it.
Ehhhh…It wasn’t a comedy.